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Mastering simple sentences teaches you how to use effect.
Learning to write in simple sentences will help you capture the
meaning you want—and not lose the power you want your words to have--and
this will help you evolve from that to tackling complex sentences with
great skill and efficiency. In your rewrites, as you get better, you
will learn to merge several simple sentences into one complex one with
amazing results and good flow. If you can punctuate properly, don’t mess
up your tenses, and can keep your words simple and your expressions
fresh, then, you’re already a master. Not easy to do, I tell you. Some
of us agonize over several rewrites before we get there (probably
because we didn’t learn the basics first).
After knowing what I now know about writing, I wondered what a Pulitzer
Prize novel was like. What was their magic? Do the writers of these
books have some kind of genius that I can’t reach? I had a look at Adam
Johnson’s Orphan Master’s Son and Donna Tartt’s Gold Finch, two Pulitzer
winners. And this is what I saw.
This is an excerpt from The Goldfinch (the very second sentence in the entire book).
“I’d been shut up in my hotel for more than a week, afraid to telephone anybody
or
go out; and my heart scrambled and floundered at even the most innocent
noises: elevator bell, rattle of the minibar cart, even church clocks
tolling the hour, de Westertoren, Krijtberg, a dark edge to the clangor,
an inwrought fairy-tale sense of doom.”
(The text has been put in quotes to show that I am quoting a line from the book)
This is a very long sentences, a complex one, which needs to be
understood in it’s simplest parts. You could even call this a merger of
several simple sentences. The writer (Donna Tartt) used a semi colon, a
colon and commas to join several simple sentences, punctuating properly.
Let’s break down this sentence and look at the component simple
sentences to see if anyone has more than 12 words. (I have put the word
count in brackets)
I’d been shut up in my hotel for more than a week, (12)
afraid to telephone anybody
or go out; (7)
and my heart scrambled and floundered at even the most innocent noises:
(12) elevator bell, rattle of the minibar cart, even church clocks
tolling the hour, de Westertoren, Krijtberg, a dark edge to the clangor,
an inwrought fairy-tale sense of doom.
The longest part is the third part, which has a list that comes after a
colon, and so we will count only up to the colon and leave out the list.
The number of words in the three simple sentences that make up this
complex sentence is 12, 7, and 12.
So Naipal’s
rule for beginners is a good one for getting to write amazing sentences. Don’t take it as a hard-an-fast
rule. If you have thirteen
or fourteen words don’t fret. I think it’s a rough estimate.
Why not pick up The Orphan Mater’s Son and The Goldfinch and you’ll be amazed at the clear complex sentences that say a lot.
You should never overdo your writing with complex sentences. You should
give breathers between them, use simpler ones between them. It’s better
to write only simple sentences than only complex sentences. In the
latter, the reader will keep slowing down to take it all in. You’ll
notice that the previous sentence doesn’t exactly flow into the next. So
Naipal is right. He knows what he is talking about. Simple sentences
help the flow of your work. Complex sentences show your skill as a
writer. But don’t do too much showing off of your skill because you will
lose good flow.
For those who care, here are Naipal’s
rules for
beginners in very short form (I’ve summarized them because I think
there’s something in there for all writers, not just beginners.) My
comments are between double asterisks.
Do not write long sentences. 10 to 12 words is enough. **Learn this, and
you can merge them into beautiful complex sentences in your rewrites.**
Each sentence should make a clear statement. It should add to the
statement that went before. A good paragraph is a series of clear,
linked statements. **This talks about good
or smooth flow.**
Do not use big words. The use of small words makes you think about what
you are writing. Even difficult ideas can be broken into small words.
**For me, any writer who can simplify a difficult idea shows he knows it
well, and I marvel at his/her power of understanding.**
Never use words whose meanings you are unsure of. If you break this
rule, you should look for other work. **LOOOOOL**
The beginner should avoid using adjectives except those of color, size
and number.**If you stick to this, you are likely to learn to SHOW and
not TELL.** Use as few adverbs as possible**this encourages the writer
to think of strong verbs, and strong verbs show while weak verbs joined
with and adverb mostly tell. Great
rule.**
Avoid the abstract. Always go for the concrete. **make it clear; lose the poetry**
Every day, for six months at least, practise writing in this way.
Simple Works Best was written by Charles Opara. He writes prose, poetry and non-fiction.